You drew me in
effortlessly
Enlisting thoughts of endearment
helplessly
melting into your arms
falling apart
surrendering to a love
I searched
every corner of the crimson blue atmosphere for
Blossoming slowly
in-perceptively at first
sending a bolt of blinding light
drawing up all senses
that had been laying dormant, dreaming
Immersing me with your affections like rain
floating me like a feather
Upon one up draft
caressing me
like I always knew you would
with all your ways
Of affection.........
Author notes
prompt line used was.....I want things to fall apart.
A contest entry
- Fall Apart (reopened) by JinSays.
700 points, ended December 6, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Thanks for your comment. I loved this piece. Similiar to mine but way better than mine. Thanks again.
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ohhh thankyou for your comment..
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Immersing me with your affections like rain
floating me like a feather
Upon one up draft
caressing me
really really nice.
There is so much to be had inside this poem.
You've done a great job on this, and I wish you the best in this contest.
Love,
jin
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