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The Puppet Master

a picnic basket
filled with penis-butter
and ham sandwiches

the air was cool and swirled
we smiled
and let our tongues walk

the checkered blanket
tainted with a smell of sweat
was worn

we spilled our
sentences like milk
while summer plums
upon each finger dangled

 

 

 

 

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  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    December 10, 2008

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    HAHAHAHA! Do you know in my family we all call peanut butter, penis butter. I freakin' love it!!

    Love stanza two, the tongues walking did it for me.

    I would combine the final two couplets - but otherwise I really liked the piece Tim!


    • sheltered
      December 10, 2008
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      lol... no way
      that's too funny

      • Melissa Gayle gold member
        December 10, 2008
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        Yep and we have a grocery store called Publix that we all call Pubics. No one ever said we were normal.


        • sheltered
          December 10, 2008
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          i can hear it now

          i'm headin' down to the pubes
          to get some penis butter honey
          need anything while i'm down there?


  • DolceVito gold member
    November 28, 2008

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    Seems I let a fortune slip out of my hands: I could've made a ton of money if I had thought about putting the stuff in jars.


  • notorious gold member
    November 28, 2008

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    PENIS BUTTER?
    god, you are so fucking bad.

    "we spilled our
    sentences like milk

    while summer plums
    upon each finger dangled"

    YEAH!! Fucking love these 4 lines...they feel very naturally-worded and have this kind of significance that isn't annoyingly epic.



    ;
    Jessica


  • Cannonsfire
    November 27, 2008
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    Hmm well no chance of being bitten, i loathe penis-butter with a passion LOL but then again....maybe it wasn't the same as what my mother tried to tell me she ate

    • sheltered
      November 27, 2008
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      penis butter is good for you
      lots of protein

      • Cannonsfire
        November 27, 2008
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        lol i know have used it as a face mask joking!!!!


        • sheltered
          November 27, 2008
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          nothing like a good penis-butter facial
          to make you feel like a reborn sex fiend

          • Cannonsfire
            November 27, 2008

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            lol nothing reborn about you though, just a practice makes perfect fetish


  • Floorboards
    November 27, 2008
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    Oh my god, what vivid imagery, so surreal and vivid!
    bravo my friend, superb poetry,
    Alex.


  • lunarlunacy
    November 27, 2008
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    enigmatic eros... very unique Tim. Kudos.

    • sheltered
      November 27, 2008
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      thanks dude
      this is what being sober does to me

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