I've been to the bank
reviewed the statements
and without fail
you've remained faithfully negative
falling short to replenish
what was previously taken out...
With emptiness in hand
all that's left is a promissory note
to do better next time
and a mouthful of sorry
worthy for the birds.
Bottom line is
unless you decide to man up
your assets will be frozen
until further notice.
A contest entry
- Liar (s) by CarolDesjarlais.
900 points, ended November 30, 2008, 15 entries
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OPh lvoe the checks and balances this implies....and then this: " mouthful of sorry
worthy for the bird"
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I feel this...it's amazing how you used unusual metaphors like a bank account...
I've been in this and I felt this lol...[sorry Ms Mo] the feeling of being treated like for me a "Pag-ibig Fund"
amazingly titled...goodluck!
Anna Lee
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Yeah...(phew...exhale) sometimes it just gets tiring huh? I have dark days where I just sink into nothingness...which makes for a heavy write when I stumble unto a great contests like this!!! 'Pag-ibig Fund'... ...I love it!
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oh yeah lol that's why I am on the site again too. hay yeah buhay parang life pag gawin kang Pag-ibig Fund lol.
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Oh, I absolutely loved this. The title is perfect and the banking theme and terms tie it all together nicely. Best wishes in the contest, though you should not need them. The font was a bit hard to read, though. Kind of reminds me of my poem http://allpoetry.com/poem/4648137
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