Crafting poem with pen;
the feel of ink painting
thoughts and images
Letter by letter,
word by word,
cool and silent
Rosy glow
upon a little bird
who flies above
Yellow and brown drooping leaves,
ready to drop from the tree
which did support them
Leaves that have completed providing
nourishment for insects and
kaleidoscopic beauty for mortal eyes
The garden is a study in diversity;
a still life apparently, yet dynamic
Pale yellow clouds pulled thin
as if angels had been making taffy;
pink stars on the orchid tree
Turquoise touch,
swirls of tangerine
in blue marbleized sky
Hibiscus puffed peach,
pointy palmettos,
darkening greens
Silhouettes of trees;
orange clouds,
soft fluorescence
Light gray streamers,
crickets begin to sing,
baby blanket pink
Associations, fleeting, make me think
of the sweetest grandmother
who loved me
And delicate, pretty things
she loved
'Been a while since I've thought about her;
mauve, bright salmon tones in the distance
Later, this night, my mother will tell me
that this was the date of Grandma's passing.
Author notes
I began writing this yesterday and just now finished.
Do you think that it fits for this contest?
A contest entry
- the crescent of maternal moon by Pamela A Lamppa.
1050 points, ended December 1, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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"which did support them" Would have liked to see "which supported them" instead.
but OH! This stanza
"Leaves that have completed providing
nourishment for insects and
kaleidoscopic beauty for mortal eyes"
is amazing. I love the soft voice and tender color you flavor this poem with and your ending paragraph brings it all to personal. An amazing entry. Thank you for this. ~Pamela
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The pen in hand,
the softly colored images
and strong memories
all intertwined
by writer so observant,
so painterly with words.
A special treat to immerse the mind
in your soft dscriptions.
M-C
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I love to watch the sunset
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I adore this write....
jam-packed with colour and the softer tint
of emotion. This to me, absolutely encompasses the prompt. Best to you dear poet. Blue
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Again my friend, your eyes always spot the most magnificent beauy.examples of unity that God has placed for all to see.
lovely vision
and of course wonderfully written
God bless you my friend...
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VERY TASTEFUL
FULL OF COLOUR AND WARMTH.YOU REALLY CREATE AN AUTUMNAL MOOD WITH YOUR IMAGERY.IT MAKES FOR A VERY SOOTHING READ. LOOKS LIKE YOU HAD A PREOMONITION.
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Thank you so much.
From time to time, I have suspected 'psychic' types of incidents.
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A warm intriguing write filled with an abundance of imagery that takes the reader not only through the sight of your eyes, but the warmth of your heart. One could sense the emotions and thoughts put into this. Best wishes in the contest! Ken IBT
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Thank you very much, Ken.
Happy Thanksgiving
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Well I do and i think it is heartfelt and completely wonderful
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