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To Light the Night

 

 

 

 

To dance with a fire that burns bright
igniting damson of the night.
is to know the way sparks fly
swirling into the sky.
Much the same with the first kiss.
One that lights your sole with bliss.
To dance with a fire that burns bright
igniting damson of the night.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    December 27, 2008
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    Thank youfor your entry

    Nice job here, very descriptive nice word usage and good imagery. I had to look up damson lol.

    The form was done well, your rhyme scheme was well developed and the flow was good. They syllable count was off in one line. Here is the break down of that line.

    "swirl-ing in-to the sky." = 6 should have been 7

    I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.

    God Bless
    Tammy


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 28, 2008

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    you know right now i have a candle burning in my room and looking at it, it kind of seems like it is dancing, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest