' one is dead, but not forgotten.
A name lived on when the body is rotten'
This is the rhyme that has been whirling
in my head. Night after night.
As I toss and turn in my bed.
As I toss my head
I feel the movement of
the undead opera
under my feet
As the black harvest moon arises
the tossing and turning get worse.
I sense the hot breath on the back of my neck
Faster, faster they run
I feel blood dripping in the corner of my mouth
Please whoever you are
unlift these eyelids
I do not want to feel the
blood any more
I do not want to feel your wrath
any longer...
A contest entry
- Improved Much? by OnlyOneLifeToLive.
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Very dark and well constructed. I do not understand the meaning of "Unlift these eyelids." How do you "unlift" something? Just wondering...
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i think
I think when you are dying anything can happen your body and imagine this person forcing their self not to look at their no decaying body so that person have have some dignity in self vein.
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Mystifying
Captivating this poem struck me in a weird way, slowly bring back a memory that has long passed. Good poem I love it
Good luck in the contest.
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thank you
thanks for the sweet commit I am so glad that you loved my poem so much.
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Shivers up the spine!
*grabs my blanket and hides in the closet*
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thank you
thank you so much for your kind comments and I am glad that you have enjoyed my first published poem
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well thats a ciller indeed i would be under the quilt with my dog by me if this was happened tossing and turning well mmm say no more on that thanks for entering the comp and good luck . sleep with the light on tonight .
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