As I step out into
the indigo highway
I close my eyes
and let the fresh water pearls
make their home on my face
the sultry scent;
revitalizing drops of heaven's dew
dance their way from
palest pillows
the faintest breeze
crawls softly on my skin
showing feelings of those
I cannot see.
Like blueberry skies
your eyes;
seductive like the forest ~
I will enjoy your presence
until you fade away
and pass on
to a new world.
Author notes
I love the rain, and I love personifying the rain. :]
A contest entry
- Easy as Pie by Cyanide Dreams.
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embracing the winter skies
Comments
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Wow, this was absolutely beautiful. I felt like I was part of the scene you described when I was reading this. All of the metaphors and similes were perfect for the poem and didn't seem stressed at all. You really have a way with words! Good luck in the contest!
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This was great! The personification, the metaphor as a whole and the imagery was just amazing. The flow was great, and the context was amazing. I loved the word choice as well. Good job and great write. Keep it up.
Josh
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nice
great imagery. i sense this may have a personal hidden meaning to it all but even if it doesn't, it makes the readers interested and caught, i really enjoyed this write and am looking foward to reading more. rhyming can often seem forced, and without it, you done a great job. nicely written and i hope you keep it up.
i will be off to read some more!
take care
- Cory Bentley
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Summing up the life in pieces is the possible process only in poetry..and you have done this here my friend..very thoughtful poetry you did..well done...
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Simply Blandiloquent. With an invigorating atmosphere of both melencholic and upbeat nature, this captivated me! Great work!
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thank you so much
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I LOVE the title and the poem and the imagery! And yes! I love the rain too! Hehe. Such an awesome piece. Penned with complete and utter brilliance! I loved this piece.
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A FINE PIECE, TO SAY THE LEAST!
I love the rain, also - and often write about it - about walking in it and about laying in bed listening to it sing a symphony upon my windows. That being said - the title of this piece is what drew me to it - for I have called the sky BLUEBERRY as well as the sea in a few of my poems that I have posted here is the last year or so. BLUEBERRY SKIES, indeed!
Love & Peace!
Earl.
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So lovely and refreshing, just like the rain! Wonderful imagery and so evocative of the feel of being out in the rain. Superb.
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This is a beautifully delicate write, Kerri.
The rain, sent to cleanse us of our sins, of our pains and aches.... to let them flow into the gutters, to be forgotten about.
You personify the rain well in this write. It's excellently written.
Bravo
'D'
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This is really pretty, and the simplicity of the abstract scheme you've used heghtens the fact; it it very well personified, as it seems like you are speaking to some onw very important to you. Though, judging from your author notes, you were speaking to some one very important to you, it just wasn't exactly a person -_^ This was very enjoyable to read; I myself llove the rain, and it makes me very sad that it hardly ever rains where I live. Thank you for sharing this with us!
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I like the rain much more after reading this, thats for sure ;-)
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I also love the rain and really was drawn to this poem. You have done a lovely job. This is well-written and just a delightful poem.
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You are so right.The rain can be invigorating and intoxicating.It renews us and the sound of the rain is my favorite part.You wrote this beatifully.You are a very talanted writer and it shows all the way through this.
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Im a rain person too, love just standing in it and letting it wash over me... lovely write, wonderful imagery.
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Superb
Ah, 'tis a fine write, indeed. You express your thoughts with clarity. Thanks for sharing this one with us.
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The title makes me think as i picture it in my mind I allowed myself the pleasure to linger at the start. The lines flow smoothly as you descriptive expression brings forth a deeper feel while reading. The emotion still raw still feeling the pleasure of this experience as you paint in words this picture. Poetry takes the everyday into an experience and I thank you for this experience. Nicely penned
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You've personified it well, almost given it life. There's a certain amount of skill that is required to weave images in a persons mind, words alone are not enough, and while some others can, to actually get the reader to envision exactly what you want takes great amounts of care and precision, something which is quite evident here,
I think this is really the only "quality" comment i've given you despite all the works i've read, and i think your also the only person i've been commenting in months
Great work angel
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