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Three Words

I love you, three words I whisper to the sky,
no chance your ears will hear my heartfelt cry.
The sun and moon reflect my feelings too,
and shine to light your way in all you do.

My love restrained, unchained, yet needs to be,
as rosebuds waiting for summer to see
their red petals open to warming caress,
so would my heart surely to you confess.

My love remains a dream in passion’s flame,
yet thoughts of desire come all the same.
My heart unclaimed in harmony possessed,
three words to starry skies again professed.

Oh nightingale your song is not for me,
the soulful tunes my love's sweet melody.

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  • Smokebox
    November 28, 2008

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    Great job!! The metaphors, wording, and images are just extraordinary! The only change is maybe switch "sweet" and "love's" in the last line. Overall another great entry! Thanks for the time and good luck!!

  • Klc3666
    November 27, 2008

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    I really like this poem it is very well written...I think you a very well written person and I like how you make your words flow very well together...