loomed over
a blush to my face
quiet-mouthed intensity
teeth out
wide smile
i won't figure this one out
(if you're a man at all)
on my own
assisted curiosity
i won't be the cat
not this time
Author notes
Prompt: A male you know (Mr. Henderson)
A contest entry
- Portrait Poetry - Male by Polaja.
1750 points, ended December 16, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Constructive criticism, please?
Comments
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Thank you for entering my contest with this poem
this is an interesting write - I really liked the "assisted curiosity" phrase in this
Keep writing
Polly
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Ahahahahahahahahaha!
Wow, you entered this contest and one of my poems is on that contest page.
Anyways...when I saw the word 'blush' in the preview...LMAO.
"quiet-mouthed intensity"
That phrase is kick-ass.
This is going to sound completely assholeish (just thought I'd give you a head's up),
but I feel like it's something I'd write and be pleased with myself for writing. LMAO.
You are sick
you know.
;
Jessica
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So...that's a good review? I really couldn't tell.
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LoL. I liked that phrase
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