Pretty Boy
You invade my dreams.
Why do you linger in my thoughts?
How can I erase you from my mind?
Pretty Boy
I think of you daily.
Could you love me?
Could I win your love?
Pretty Boy
You make my mind unfaithful.
Why am I loving you?
Am I just lusting you?
Oh Pretty Boy
Please show me the truth.
Are you as perfect as you seem?
Are you the man in my dreams?
Darling Pretty Boy
My body longs for yours.
My heart calls out for the man in my dreams,
I don’t think you exist as such Beautiful Man.
Imaginary Man
My secret dream lover.
I have created you.
In my mind you will stay.
Pretty Boy
Love me in my dreams.
Ravish me in the dark corners of my mind.
Thrill me with secret kisses when I blink my eyes.
Never leave me.
Love me in my dreams,
My Pretty Boy.
Author notes
Okay, so I was sitting up late at night and I had the first paragraph of this pop into my head. I ran with it and this is it.
Umm, I don't really have a question.. Will you please not be rough with this?
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Very good write! I love how you kept repeating Pretty Boy. Keep your chin up and keep on writting!
Shannyn -
I think everyone has had this "dream lover" at one point or another. I think this could be better without the "pretty boy" constantly, then again, I am not a fan of something repeating over and over, so it could just be me! I tried doing it once, and didnt do a very good job, so I guess I am a little biased But this is a great write, sweet, and dreamful
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It's interesting how you repeat pretty boy...it reminds me of calling after a dog, with adds to it more then anything...because you are calling on this guy to come and whisk you away, and yet you are doubting him.
Nice little poem about longing for your picture perfect one to sweep you away.
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line 12: add "for" or "after" after "lusting", it makes more sense that way.
line 21: maybe if you changed it to "pretty boy" so it goes with the rest of the poem that would flow better.
A nice poem about longing and love. Yes, we've all felt a one-sided love like this before, and it's kept us awake all night dreaming and hoping. -
I really like where you went with this.
"Ravish me in the dark corners of my mind" I love this line, it gives a real private feel for the thoughts rolling around in your head.
"In my mind you will stay" probably for the best lol they never turn out to be as perfect as you imagine
bravo!! keep up the good work!
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