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Your Dream Lover

Lay down my love.
Close your lovely eyes.
Sleep my love.
Drift away to
nothingness.

Think of me.
Long for me.
Want .
So I may enter
into your dream.


I’ll be there
but a silhouette
coming to you
from the shadows
of the corner of your room.

For I long to hold you.
Kiss the tears
from your eyes and
love away your loneliness.
as the two of us
become one.


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Lionheart--4 entries

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  • jayyniecakes.
    February 6
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    i feel like the lines need to be longer.... they're too short to say anything to me.


  • ForeverLastingComa
    January 26

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    I like this, it's very calm and relaxing. I especially liked the last stanza

    "For I long to hold you.
    Kiss the tears
    from your eyes and
    love away your loneliness.
    as the two of us
    become one"

    thanks for entering and good luck


  • Desire gold member
    December 7, 2008

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    Wowzers~

    You plan to revise
    Where - When and Why
    I was reading and dropped my jaw
    -See-

    Love the words: Kiss the tears~
    Beautiful my Friend!!
    Thank You for sharing Your Passion also Heart~
    Many blessings to You Sweet One
    Best wishes too
    with much love & light~ Desire~*~