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Louder. And Louder Still.

Louder, louder
Shiver through my bones.
Louder, louder
Sliding under my skin.
Reverberating within my heart,
delicious vibrations.
Push.
Twirl.
Louder, and louder still,
pleasure blends with pain.
Deeper, heavier,
hmm. Drown out
excess sound,
excess thoughts,
and excess loud.
Scream.
Beg.
For it to stop.

A rustle,
a tug,
scraping metal,
a small spark,
Silence.
Ripples fade,
smooth out,
water’s clear.
Silence.
Ahh.
Delicious oblivion,
I’m painted black.

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  • DolceVito gold member
    November 28, 2008
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    Super cool write...Thank you for entering.