Looking at me is it easy
to see that I lost my heart long ago?
The
tide swept in with a hooked-shaped saftey pin and
I replaced my soul with sorrow.When I swam out to sea I
went in too deep the current began to pull me
under.
Gasping
for air but breathe; I didn't dare
the sea became my
hunter.
Though love was long gone
I
felt the need to pawn
my
life.
Give it a-
way to find love again. But instead what
I
found was land and dry ground and was grateul for what I had then.
Hope.
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A contest entry
- Constantly Overcoming by Byepolar bare.
675 points, ended December 20, 2008, 13 entries
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I like the message in this, and the sentence along the margin line especially. Your imagery is strong and powerful.
Well penned,
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I read the first words down first, just to get the acrostic meaning. Loved it.
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Please revise
Please revise this and notify me when you have done so, this has not followed the requested format. I will not judge the poem until it does, there is a link to an example poem on the contest page. The best I can describe the format is word acrostic. -
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I think I fixed what you meant, now.
Thanks for the heads up.
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