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Wincing (Haiku)

shot of whiskey
head shakes freely
fire water

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Prompt "Wince"

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  • DogFish silver member
    November 29, 2008
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    sip it you'll enjoy it better!


    (...and still get the same kick!)


  • ml12
    November 27, 2008

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    This was good. I thought that a haiku contained 17 syllables (5,7,5) but I think that you used the for well in structuring how the poem is read. It describes the act well and the last line was a nice touch. Cheers