Long fingernails that tantalize and tease
drip ice cold water onto fiery skin,
small frozen cube melts in a deathly squeeze,
white freezing breath exhales from deep within.
Cascading frosted water slides between
ice massaged into muscles once relaxed,
where other cooling rivulets have been
contort and strain, sub zero upto max.
A contest entry
- his tears fall like snakes down his cheeks. by stylization.
625 points, ended November 26, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Fantasy Fun by Bella Cullen.
550 points, ended November 29, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
1 - 5 of 5
-
"Long fingernails that tantalize and tease
drip ice cold water onto fiery skin,
small frozen cube melts in a deathly squeeze,
white freezing breath exhales from deep within."
good luck in my contest
-
Wow you certainly are coming at things from a very different direction now and well done too.
-
imagery brilliant
Hiya.
I really like the imagery you have used here. I especially like the description of the deathly squeeze and the feeling of ice being massaged into muscle. What I like about this is, as I read it, I could feel myself in that position - In fact, I felt cold!
well done, once again.
-
thanks for the entry, nice imagery.
best of luck! -
Oh boy
What wonderful thoughts you have planted in this old SOBs head poet. I say where is she and bring it on. lol
Adding your comment:
1 - 5 of 5
