in fields of retention
the puppet master preens
while moon sways its clues
footfalls plodding
marionette views
a fools that enters
trapped in sublime
dependant on its mentor
a existentialist mind
sensory deprivation
in nooses serene
the curtain rises
to surrealistic dreams
Author notes
Artist credit: http://smygol.deviantart.com/art/The-last-court-45593761
A contest entry
- Abstract Art Inspired.... by jcat.
700 points, ended December 1, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Breathtaking!
dependent on its mentor
a existentialist mind
sensory deprivation
in nooses serene
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Nice, this is truly wonderful, the mention of the puppet master makes me shudder, kind of reminds me of someone pulling the strings, like playing with human beings almost as if they were dolls themselves.
This is beautiful, the poem didn't make me shudder but the word "puppet master" is what the word reminds me of.
This is really stunning and I like this, good luck in the contest, but you don't need any luck, it is a piece of art.
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Sensory deprevation....One of the worst things I think that we can experince. To be trapped in the recesses of our mind and body with no recourse. A wonderful piece you have penned and thank you for your entry
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this is really interesting poem, i like your take the prompt, it really fits in well with the piece of art, i can feel the loneliness of the puppet, wow, best of luck in the contest
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well done
a gentle trip through the back door of your mind
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