Soft flesh found life,
quivered deep
at his touch,
Awakening to love
unlike heaven, so much richer.
Souls fused in that gaze,
the sum of two parts
far exceeding the worth
of just 'we'.
But the dreamer stirred
to the sound
of her love
creeping back from the ecstasy of another.
Cold and real
broke the dream
to a night
unlike hell, so much blacker.
A contest entry
- Exit Strategy by vampedvixen.
1200 points, ended November 27, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Looking forward to your thoughts
Comments
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Hmmm...if anyone cheats then they don't deserve you, been there done this and it's not nice. Glad to say it doesn't apply anymore.
~ Lucy
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Thank you so much for entering my contest. I haven't had a chance to reply to any of the poems until now. I love the line "Awakening to love / unlike heaven, so much richer." Love, to me, is exactly like this.. so beautiful and wonderful, just like heaven
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This is deserving of a trophy, the picture it paints is dark love and the finding of someone not in control of their emotions because they really have no idea what they want. You paint it blacker than the pitch of night. Well done.
C
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i love this piece... Cold and real
broke the dream
to a night
unlike hell, so much blacker.
such a dream breaker.... but prior to, what a paradise, so haavenly!
great piece!!
becca
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Thanks so much, Becca, for always reading and commenting!
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