One by one,
my garden will grow,
as more and more
visit my humble abode.
The beauty of their deaths,
overshadows
their repulsive lives.
It is with a rose I mark
where their bodies lie.
Author notes
10 Poets
35 WORDS
40 Minutes
OPTION 2:
The_Dark_Tower_by_milkfork
http://milkfork.deviantart.com/art/The-Dark-Tower-48134037
A contest entry
- 10/35/40 Quickie! by Sweet Impatience.
700 points, ended November 30, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
i do plan to edit so any and all advise is welcome, or just drop a line and tell me what you think
Comments
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Such a lovely rose garden lol. I am not sure what the contest was but congrats on the win. I enjoyed this SH
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This is an excellent poem and I'm glad you got a gold Trophy for it....... The poem is dark and mysterious, I like it
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Congratulations on the Gold!
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Fantastic, dark, for such a short piece it is such a brilliantly detailed story. really great pic match, in fact i dont like pic prompts much and i reckon all the other choices in this comp were pretty shite, but that pic was good and that interpretation was great..
just flat out great concept
and the dark gardener is a great title
so my kind of thing
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I must say, your poetic prowess has grown. That is by far the best write of yours I have read yet. Kudos.
it might be a bit pic dependant maybe add a small stanza to give it legs. i so fall prey to the same on pic prompts but the muse loves em
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lovely, lovely.....it etches....bleedingly...
our hearts with dread...to check our beds
make sure...no rose lays there
to decapitate our heads.
collecting again are you?
hmmmm....now what have we told you
about....public decapitation!
ears/Seattle
wonderful writing!
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This has an honest intensity about it, I love it.
The imagery is excellent and very deserving of the gold! Congrats!
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You know, this pc is pissing me off, I just had a long comment here and now it's gone.
I'll save it.
Congratulations on your gold.
Love,
jin -
whew.
Im staying away from you, LOL.
Then again, if they're that bad, they probably deserved it.
Dark, scary.
COngratulations on your trophy, it's purty.
Love,
jin
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Great imagery and extended metaphor. Congratulations on the gold trophy.
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i can see why you won the gold gave me the shivers...
great write.
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well these are the darkest 35 words that I've seen in a long time.. the imagery is outstanding & extremely vivid. this is actually extremely dark. I'll remember to stay on your good side and not upset you.. I don't want to be a rose in your garden, nope not at all. not me, not now.. Brilliant take on the prompt.
good luck
kat
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the imagery is powerful, well done!!!
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Interestingly, convincingly dark...
Very creative! Excellent use of metaphor and outstanding imagery!! 
Wishing you all the best of luck in the contest!!! 
Peace always, Cyn 
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Impressive!!!
And gotta say, loving the darkness here, you wield it well...
So much said in so few words with fantastic imagery that leaves the reader both thoughtful & contemplative...
Well penned, well versed, well done!!!
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Wow a garden of dead bodies the soil would have lots of compost for the roses ...seriously a wonderfully dark write and an eggcelllent read
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Your power in the dark genre is because your poetry is image full. This poem expresses darkness with passion.
Love,
Amera♥
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Well that is not just a bit dark that is flat dark
you use of imagery is keen and flow is strong and steady
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Wonderful write Aaron! I am so glad I can finally read your poetry now
Awesome work!
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absolutely wickedly dark
excellent Aaron
Grins
Roses to you well if you can find some room there
Teresa
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Wow, that's some bodies you have there
A deeply dark write hun, superbly penned! You've captured the picture brilliantly. Awesome little write
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This poem is powerful, stuffed with dark emotions and such a perfect flow in it. I also liked the dark humor in it, this is simply perfect!
Best of luck in the contest my knight ^_^
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Brilliant
Aaron hun this is truly remarkable masterpiece that sure deserves the trophy - short but powerful piece... best of luck in the contest, though I think of this one to be a winner... take care Minoo
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oh wow...this is a beautifully written dark piece you have here. I love it...and the picture is very neat as well...good job! best of luck to you in the future and with your writing.
andi
(redhanded)
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i love the dark feel of this, it's really interesting. the image goes along very well, and the imagery in the piece itself is excellent. great write!
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gorgeous as always doll..
very well structured,, the flow is very even and runs right through...
another one well done
keep em coming..
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woah. Talk about powerful.
"The beauty of their deaths,"
And yea, that line really caught my eye. Not quite sure why, but does that really matter? Nahhh, It's very good! -
lovely piece!
i dont believe you need to say Their twice in this line...but then again to reach 35 you do...just a thought!
The beauty of their deaths,
overshadows
their repulsive lives.
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Wow.. I enjoy the feel of this one..
It's kind of got the 'Satanic' more than the 'Dark' feel.
I love how the words are just descriptive enough to put thousands of images into your mind. It's one of those scary type poems, that just seem to soothe the soul in some sort of archaic way..
I really enjoyed this work tremendously.. Keep up the flowing poetry.. And remember.. Don't lose sight of your muse this time! Keep her tight within your grasp~!
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Wow. Thanks for sending this. It is absolutely incredible. I love gardening, so the idea of a dark gardener...fascinating.
Best of luck in the contest!!!
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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