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The Failure of Sir Boreas

a bitter, cold wind that blows
through branches not yet barren
the fertile green immortilized by ersa's morning frost

the wind, he blows to shake the leaf from her lofty perch
and little leaf, she will not fall beneath earth's chestnut feet

boreas, he will not win
soon spring shall bring the summer
virgins hold your virture; in thrace he pines for you

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  • PiratexxLove
    November 27, 2008
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    Hmmm

    Short, which I enjoy.
    I'm a bit, wordless lol. I enjoyed it.