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A Sonnet to Suicide

 

A higher mind is open to the sky, 
But heaven slams its gate with thunderclap: 
Snotty nimbus echo the blasted cap, 
And throw down lightning when the blown out eye 
Offends no more.  A hateful rain, like lye, 
Pours from the ire:  Mirrors the wrinkled flap  
Of plum;  mixes the scattered pit, with slap 
Of wet-on-wet, before the bloating sigh... 
 
The rain will never stop, the earth will flood, 
The ground will turn into a soggy slime 
Where slugs and roaches rule with putrefaction.  
It seems the brilliant ones prefer the grime 
To dismal skin;  they find the world distracting -- 
BANG! -- Heads flare off a barrel:  Mind in mud.
 

 

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  • Night Hope gold member
    November 16
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    We had several quite lengthy discussions about this very subject, Julien. How I wish you could have found that elusive path out of the darkness and back into light. Ah, but you are dwelling within that light now, I know. I hope to encounter your fine spirit one day and be able to impart to you how very beloved you were among us. Rest in peace, Sparrow.


  • trekkergirl
    July 13

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    Suicide is not a good way to go... the pain the person feels is so intense... so consuming... tha it never dulls. You can't think about how others might feel at your parting because of this pain.

    I personally think that writing about this pain helps. That sometimes in our writings the pain becomes somewhat less at least for a short time.

    This is an excellent write because it gives the reader an insight into how the writer is feeling. Pain, frustration, and yes, even anger.

  • ecrivain01
    July 7
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    Ouch ...

    this is painful to read. I am wondering where you've gotten to since I haven't heard from you in so long.

    I've only just begun to write again, so that's at least one positive thing in my life. I hope there are many positive things going on in yours, and you're not here because you're too busy having a great time elsewhere.


  • Grunts Girl
    November 26, 2008

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    having found 3 men who actually had shot their brains out... this was down right creepy - making me wonder if you have seen this yourself because of the raw true emotion in this.

    the blown out eye-- stuck with me (no not on me lol)... (sorry sick humor)- litterally seeing an eye someplace it doesnt belong freaked me out silently for years... i got hard to it- but when you sleep the softness of insanity creeps in and tortures.

    amazing sonnet


  • just mercedes gold member
    November 26, 2008
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    Great poem. You show no fear in exploring the depths, and the imagery is wonderfully apt.


  • untitled.
    November 26, 2008
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    I was recommended to you by BlancetNoir, and with very good reason. You are illegally brilliant. Who said sonnets have to be about love or yearning? This is a breath of jagged air, the below-zero kind that bites down your throat, and makes your heart stop. Genius. I love this, and now will put you as a favorite. Effective Immediately. Much thanks for this.

    Blown away by a .22 magnum,

    ~S.

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