Treasure is in your children's smiles, its in every thing they do.
Treasure is the golden miles uniting me and you.
Treasure is the love you give, a hug, a smile, a kiss,
Treasure is a special thing that holds a loving wish.
Treasure can be found in side two hearts that beat as one,
Treasure is the love we've shared since time has begun.
Treasure is not a object, not something you can buy,
Treasure is the pain you feel when a loved one says goodbye.
Treasure is the happiness shining through your eyes,
Treasure is the sadness, we feel when we cry.
Treasure is every single emotion, that a person could ever feel,
So if you find somebodies treasure,then return it because its real.
Author notes
sister or sister inlaw if u haven't got to many lol
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Comments
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Aw.. very sweet. I liked some of the lines, but the repetition didn't work for me.
I liked the first and second stanza especially
Thanks for entering. <3
- Blue
beauty
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This was a very beautfully written piece you have here. I have some sisters but you can be my sister too if you want. I enjoyd reading this. Just send me a message with your name and I will add you to my page and favorites. Thanks for entering and best of luck too you in the contest.
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Heartfelt
Your poem is heartfelt. It is a great poem but I don't like this line:
Treasure is the pain you feel when a loved one says goodbye.
because we shouldn't treasure some one we love leaving us. So my main suggestion is be careful of lines like that or lines that are worded poorly. Besides that I really enjoyed your poem. -
Wow that really touched my heart. It almost made me wanted to cry because it was beautiful. I really enjoyed reading your poem. I hope you do well in my contest and thanks for entering. Love and Peace!
-Jess
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life is a treasure isn't it? like the ship underneath the ocean...we often don't see the bury treasure until we are in murky water..lol..nicely done
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well posted and very nicely formed, thank you for this entry to my contest..
MM
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Is touching.... Your poem's a
Your poems a treasure to behold,
Your poem is a treasure, no need to laugh,
Because i won't scold...
Thank you for kindly entering my contest!!!!
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one man's trash is another man's treasure, I liked this poem, treasure has never been only colored in gold. Great write, and thannk you for entering.
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This is a treasure to read...making me consider somethings that I hadnt thought about in terms of treasure...thanks for your entry
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This is a gorgeous write. I love this reocccurring theme of treasure and what it means to you - your exploration of it teaches you a lot about love and life. Such sweet and tender words, and a lovely rhyming scheme. Thanks for entering the contest
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These are some beautiful treasures of life and sometimes we forget the good things as we focus so much on the negatives, which really is a shame because there are some beautiful things in the world for us to enjoy and marvel at, we just don't take the time to see them truth the turmoils.
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This is a precious treasure and delight to read! Your words are choice, meaningful and so sentimental! Your rhyme, and flow superb!Bookmarked!
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Lovely write here
So true ar your words here I so enjoyed this poem
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This is nice. I thought you were going to go into depth about one aspect we might name as treasure, but you started writing about different dimensions of the word. I like that, it kept me interested. This is very sweet, and it reminds me of something you'd see for mother's day, or a sparkly Hallmark card speaking of thankfulness.
"Treasure is every single emotion, that a person could ever feel,
So if you find somebodies treasure,then return it because its real. "
These lines sum up your poem very well, and they refer back to the title nicely. I like that.
Thanks for sharing and entering the contest. Much appreciated.
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Yes, I like it. It got me thinking about the things mentioned - small stuff rather than the bigger stuff.
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"Treasure is the love you give, a hug, a smile, a kiss," - Wonderful!
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wow, this is awesome, I really love it. I love your thinking on this, it's so true. People are so wrapped up in material things these days they forget what the real treasures in life are.
bloody good job, keep them coming, I'll be back!
Amy x
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Wow ! this is amazingly wrote so beautiful good luck in the contest
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Yes this is just gorgeous! I felt the repetition worked well here too. An excellent poem, but way over the word limit. But I think you deserve some clappies
Gaylene
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Beautiful. The repitition works well, although the last stanza, especially the last line, doesn't quite work for me. Also, you could take out the first comma in the second to last line.
Overall, nice job.
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