I write acrostic summaries
to your name
and love poems
on my math homework
because all these emotions
calculate to you.
My fingers have defined partitions,
holding your smiles in place
so we don't tilt backwards
and wilt.
The storms are exhausting,
neverending,
brutal -
and the rain drips like glitter,
dragging down my heart -
so we regress, spinning disasters;
and I, desperate to grip memories,
become the stain on your chest
fraying rapidly
without you.
Author notes
No, you're not dreaming. I wrote a love poem.
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For Marty:
For all he has done to help me and for being my rock.
And a very sexy one at that 
In a list
A contest entry
- WRITE! by luna-midnight.
700 points, ended December 16, 2008, 20 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - prewrites. by Melissa Gayle.
700 points, ended December 22, 2008, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Now you tell me:
Comments
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Awe. Well this is a very strong poem. A lot of emotions and much imagery. I loved it and thank you very much for entering my contest, best of luck to you
<3Damien -
cool
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lovely, i enjoyed this poem very much, it was a heart warming poem, i liked the part "love poems
on my math homework
because all these emotions
calculate to you."
wonderful write, thanks for entering!
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Haha you already know what I think. Thanks for the entry.
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Hey Chandni, I have missed you dearheart.
And did you know there are hearts on the side of this page, are you feeling well? Feverish perhaps?
You had me at stanza one -
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lol!
yes, a bit feverish maybe
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hehe...now now now...i love it ^_^
curse the math hw...love notes is much more fun...haha..maybe...or maybe sleep
but either way this is wicked. good luck and thanks for entering!
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what a cheesy opening stanza, the pun, it was too much, it really was
the second stanza has the possiblity of standing on it's own
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WOW and what a love poem it is...brilliant! Funny how often we write things that even shock ourselves...very beautiful and full of emotions...deeply heartfelt and touching...yuck, all the things you hate to hear...
Well done.
Best,
mystic
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Outstanding
wow i really like this it holds so much emotions. I can feel the love throught your words. thanks for a amazing read.
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Fantastic!
What a great love poem. You've captured something that I can only ever wish to. Five stars; I love it.
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My heart just stopped. The unthinkable has happened. And exquisitely executed. Well done, and endless congrats on the whole love thing,
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*still in shock, with multiple pinch wounds*
~S.
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lol!
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You write very few love poem,
but you have a real talented for writing them.
This was very nicely done, with still a touch of the real you. Maybe you should try writing more. It's nice to see the other side of you, that you like to hide.
Lovely writing.
Love You,
Granny
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wow, I never thought I'd see it either.
but your love poem is remarkable. your word choices make the emotions lift from the page
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Lol the Impossible has now accured, I liked it, I like seeing this side of you, now only if we could get you to write somemore of those amazing poems with rhyme
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*almost dies*
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lol
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your background border is so cheesy, by the way.
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haha
i was one to think it'd never be put to use
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well, I'm glad it is. use it more often.
just don't forget your dark side. I like those poems, too.
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I knew it!
Soo...
you better write more, or I think I'll just have to go wherever the heck you are now and kick yer butt.
Love you!
Jeanette*~
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now i've picked my jaw up from the floor, i'll see if my disbelief allows me to comment properly (are you sure thats you Chan?)
I absolutly adore the first two stanzas.
Stanza three starts just as good, but the "falling off my heart" spils it a bit.
First line of stanza four ... no, no, no .. much to normal for you.
love the ending.
you may not really like love poetry, but you sure as hell can write it.
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lol, everyone is shocked
I fixed it a bit
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WHAT! WHHHAAAT! Do you want to make me through up into a pot, boil it, and then drink it?
LOL! Just kidding. The poem's itself is great, but the content is shocking and a little disturbing come from you. I tried imagining you as one of those cutesy wutesy girls and almost laughed my head off.
The background makes me hurl too.
holding your smiles in place
so we don't tilt backwards
and wilt.
Striking imagery; it really portrays your strong emotion and shows me that you have a great bond with Marty!!!
Puke-a-licious. I loved it.
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hahahahahah!
you're a madman
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emotions calculate to you - nice
partitions - not overly keen on
tilt/wilt - yay
rain drips like glitter - pretty
leaks through my eyes - no, don't like
become the stain on your chest - yes, though I hate it when Thom cries and gets make-up over my NICE CLOTHES
how heartless am I?
really love the ending...really really really
fucking hell, what's next...
you writing in morse code or somethin
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I've never cried in front of someone
Don't feel so bad for your clothes, I might steal them anyway.
what's morse code? -
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dot dot dot dash dash dash dot dot dot
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I haven't even read the poem
Just saw the background
I am now dead. -
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hahahaha
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awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!
<33333 I luff you forever! *hug
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[could you fix the comment, lol?]
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This is a *wonderful* love poem. You'd better keep at this.
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dont encourage this.
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Hey, I'll encourage whatever I like.
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i was joking, lighten up.
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I terribly doubt that
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