I know it’s hard to grasp the full meaning
Of this look I have … the way I’m gleaming
As I touch you there upon your soft breasts
Oh, how you ignite this man’s seething quest
I cannot explain it very well you see
What it is that you do to me
Perhaps it’s just some old, primitive action
That was imprinted on my inherited reactions
All I can think of when I’m so taken in
Is the way we are when we’re skin to skin
You arch your back and toss back your head
And then lead me smiling to our warm bed
I softly bury my face between them both
Breathing in your sweet scent as we start to roast
Without doing anything but just you being you
I am compelled to declare my deep love is true
Can it be a wonder, my dear love partner
That you make me rise most hard and harder
And now I realize that it’s not just your breasts
For it is all of you that fulfills my quest
A contest entry
- Suzyque needs to know...Is Love Alive....Show me...Past Present, Future by SuZyCuE.
900 points, ended December 11, 2008, 12 entries
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Wow, this was awesome. Sorry I've got no better comment, but this is a very good poem, best of luck in the contest.
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Nice take on the contest's prompt.
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are you like.... retarded?
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I'm sorry... the reason I ask is because I am retarded and feel a similar way.... forgive me for assuming you were "special" like me.
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I love how you ended it
Sometimes titles can be misleading but once I read the work itself I am really pleased with how it ended. I love the fact that you explained that you love all of her and not just those particular two body parts
It's kinda funny how we start off liking one thing about a person whether its sexual or not but how it can end up that this person really matters and that there is more to it. I think you hit the contest prompt right on the nose and that love is alive you really made an impact with this one good luck!
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this is very good! i loved it. its very well written and flows so well. i especially liked the last stanza! it ends the whole thing oh so well! i enjoyed reading it. thank you so much for sharing!
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