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Last Dance

Missing image

  Thought all life had left
  Observing deaths shades
  Of lifelessness

  Till momentarily illumined
  In mourning's light
  Tears of love
  Trans-parenting

 

  Forms transition

  In amber hues

  Of spirit's Godliness

 

  Faith renewed

  As earthen essences

  Danced her last waltz

  Celebrating in rebirth

 

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Option 1
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  • rbruce gold member
    June 14

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    This is a great take on the prompt. Your descriptions of autumn leaves creates lovely thoughts, even as I try to clean up the mass of leaves in my yard. I'll look at the mess differently now.


  • AAA Taurus The Bull gold member
    January 6

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    good

    . Wonderful poem very well done Powerful piece of Poetry There were no errors. Or No typos. I got my eye on you. I Would change. I look forward to your next poem


  • daviscth silver member
    December 28, 2008

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    Wow, this is a beautiful poem filled with imagery. I love the picture and your words are perfect for it.

  • Bob Fox
    December 26, 2008
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    Ah poet

    As time goes by each day brings us something new and beautiful. Search it out and enjoy.


  • geckogirl silver member
    December 20, 2008
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    Simply beautiful...


  • Ademon
    December 12, 2008

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    Inspired

    I was greatly inspired by the way you write, it flows so smoothly and paints a vivid picture cast on a mural before me."Till momentarily illumined In mourning's light Tears of love Trans-parenting" Beautiful. I hope to capture an audience such as you have with this poem.


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    December 10, 2008

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    Glorious Imagery...

    Awesome words flowing like honey. Very zen-like. Thank you for sharing, and I'm wishing you the best in the contest!!! Peace always, xx Cyn xx


  • Sandygram silver member
    December 5, 2008

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    You have penned such lovely imagery within your words. A lovely poem to read this cold autumn morning. Take care.

    Blessings,
    Sandy


  • KayJay
    December 2, 2008

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    Wonderful nature inspired write... you're deft touch adds a gentleness to the beauty of this...
    Excellent write.
    Ken


  • Ken-Maverick
    December 1, 2008

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    This is just beautiful,
    the serenity of nature seeps through your words
    Well done and good luck in the contest

    Ken


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    November 29, 2008

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    you did an excellent job with the prompt. the imagery throughout this piece is fabulous. such a beautiful poem that you've penned. I love the last stanza the most..

    good luck
    kat


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    November 29, 2008

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    I really like the last stanza! great write and creative take on the prompt ~

    Good luck


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    November 29, 2008
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    I really like the last stanza! great write and creative take on the prompt ~

    Good luck


  • Alyzeh
    November 28, 2008

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    Brilliantly penned, I enjoyed the flow very much! I think the take on the prompt was excellent as well. You are an inspirational writer.
    Good luck!

    Love, Alyzeh


  • Patpowers silver member
    November 28, 2008
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    Good work again Jesaan! You did a splendid job with the picture and the words...THANKS!!


  • LilEmoPrincess
    November 26, 2008
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    Nicely written and portrays the pictuer well.


  • Beret55 silver member
    November 26, 2008
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    aahha , Now your cooking. Very good.

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