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Morning rain taps;
Awakens ardent dreams on the eve of September
Among the sparsely dressed trees,
she pauses before a single maple
as it collects amber gems like jewelry
that glistens in the breeze of an afterthought
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Author notes
Option 1
Credit Pic: http://autumn-ethereal.deviantart.com/art/Autumn-Ethereal-81379364
A contest entry
- 10/35/40 Quickie! by Sweet Impatience.
700 points, ended November 30, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Im still revising this piece. Constructive criticism is welcome
Comments
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Lovely words...
Thanks for sharing!
Write on!
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Another beautiful piece. Congratulations on the HM!
I am at loss for words now. Hehe. I've already told you how amazing your work is countless times. Sorry that I have nothing else to say. Is it my fault your talent leaves me in dumbfounded and in complete awe?! Na-uh! It's your fault!
Hahaha
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I really enjoyed reading your poem. I sat here trying to decide which part did I like the best.. and I must say I love the entire piece.. the imagery is beautiful and this has a calm & gentle feel to it. excellent take on the prompt.
good luck
kat
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thank you
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"collecting amber gems like jewelry
that glistens in the breeze of an afterthought"
this is really, really beautiful, i love the moment here and the above lines so much
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Lovely !!
"that glistens in the breeze of an afterthought"
Simply beautiful.
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Very original and beautiful.
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