the last foliole of a tree sways against a tinkling breeze,
droplets collecting on it's skin,
attached but by a single filament, weak upon it's grip .
the petal gives in,
aurelian sunlight warming it's dew.
Author notes
Prompt: http://autumn-ethereal.deviantart.com/art/Autumn-Ethereal-81379364
I wrote freely flowing and stopped when i thought it was done and then i realized i had gone WAY over the word limit. So I had to do a lot of condensing. I hope it didn't hinder my piece. I hope you like! Enjoy!
A contest entry
- 10/35/40 Quickie! by Sweet Impatience.
700 points, ended November 30, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Really beautiful.
Love your word choices here, they complement the poem so well. && I could see the picture clearly in my head without the image added above it.
Congrats on the gold! It was well-deserved.
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Thank you very very much
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amazing!!
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Thanks!
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ah, beautiful poem...lovely
good word choices made the poem sound gentle
congrats on the gold!!
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thank you!
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Very nice !!
I like this poem, seems sad yet warm.
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thank you!
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lovely write!
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Thanks!
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this is a beautifully written poem. I really love this one a lot. the imagery throughout this piece is vivid & excellent. I love the last line of this poem. You did an excellent job with the prompt
good luck
kat
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Thank you very much!
I loved the prompt!
Awesome contest!
I'll keep an eye out for more of yours.
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thats a pretty leaf and the poem describes so much about it perfectly!
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Teehee thaaank you!
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^_^
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