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Colourless Flower

Enclosure spiny roses
suffocates perfume scent
bleeding, colourless, dry.

Evaporating youth
silk appearance,  acid rain
damaging roots.

wilting; satin sheets flutter
dusty earth, tuneful song
never to be forgotten.

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  • Legendary
    December 8, 2008
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    this was ok of a write. THe imagery was simply clear and the description was clear.


  • LyricalFl0w
    December 4, 2008
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    I really like this...this is so emotional..full of pain


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    November 28, 2008
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    great imagery...i really like the ending

    Good luck