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Suns Rayz

Lying
Meditating
Shade on eyes
Skin bare
for suns rays

A contest entry

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  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    November 27, 2008
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    creatively drawn... x


  • Kappa Pyua
    November 26, 2008

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    very simplistic. I don't think periods are neccessary though since they are not sentences. Thanks for sharing.


  • dustytiger
    November 26, 2008

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    very well done with only ten words, i want to meditating in the sun lol, best of luck in the contest