Choking up inside myself
Drowning in my thought filled sea
All because I’m perfectly flawed
And you’re perfectly wrong for me
Blinded by your darkness
Driven to compare
My mind is a perfect tragedy
And my heart is a guilty affair
Suffocating in the shadows
Frozen by the warmth of your skin
The high pitch sound of your silence
Destroys all the rubble within
You send my mind into jumbles
With it perfectly combed into knots
Take away this binding of freedom
Take away all that I’ve got
Destroy any doubts I have in my mind
Soak up my desert of tears
Demolish the crossroad of choices in me
And smother me till it all clears
Standing at a lonesome stretch of a bend
Your face is fading away
My heart is perfectly tangled
Not knowing which place I should stay
Give me a reason for believing
As you circle my mind like a snake
That unveiling my buried secrets to you
Is not a perfect mistake
Author notes
two words ... confused much? haha
A contest entry
- In Your Head by Candyknife.
700 points, ended November 30, 2008, 21 entries
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Comments
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This poem is just brilliantly written, and I love how so many opposites were coming together to create your thoughts...such as:
"Soak up my desert of tears"
"Frozen by the warmth of your skin
The high pitch sound of your silence"
I love writing such as that, and you brought this situation to life so vividly. Excellent job!
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wow
compelling and heart pulling
i liked this very much
good job -
I love this write
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