Forfeiting thoughts of love,
grieving -
for my soul is dying.
I lay timelessly;
nothing gives.
Author notes
what I'm looking for:
-imagery
-intelligence
-brevity
-impact
I guess we are feeling the same right now huh?
Well I wanted this to be short and I got it down to 15 words. I think the title needs polishing but whatever..maybe later.
Saw this pic and fell in love!!! Hope its okay I used it...
Artist Credit: Dead To The World by ~TearsOfEternity
http://tearsofeterinty.deviantart.com/art/Dead-To-The-World-66374509
A contest entry
- the nameless wonder by Immortal Obscurity.
400 points, ended November 29, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What to do in an insane world?
Comments
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"I lay timelessly...nothing gives" great line!
Good luck
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Hmmm... While you did say a lot in a little, I still think that you could have expanded on this idea. I also loved your title, and that picture is positively divine Well done, and thanks for entering.
Laura
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Strong choice of words that rendered a very good piece of poetry. Very well done, Poet.
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