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like mud...

 

Night became a haunted past

as hours slipped by, some rustic features-

a delight in day, blended beneath cobweb clouds.

Like vagrants, slowly wandered mists

played tricks with moonbeams.

 

We felt life slipping like cool water through fingers

for none can catch every raindrop,

when there are such disobedient clouds

and truths become the anchors that tie us to the mud,  until

 

we hold breath beneath rising floods

and surging tides cover our eyes; until

 

for survival, we burn from the heat of wasted air

but know we cannot find means like fish.

Some idea of truth it was that held us there,

and now we simply inspire slow agony, unless

 

we admit from the awful weight

bellows bursting within

 

that even unfeeling waves of time

make riddles of us all... and so many virtues

upon which we build so much of ourselves,

become more and more like the mud.

 

 

 

 

 

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  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    November 30, 2008

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    aw, yes, indeed... "even unfeeling waves of time

    make riddles of us all... and so many virtues

    upon which we build so much of ourselves,

    become more and more like the mud"

    Well written. Well said!

  • JustBreathe gold member
    November 26, 2008

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    An interesting contest topic, and a subject I have little patience for … lies and the people who tell them. Telling lies leads to dark, murky destructive places (like gigantic mud holes -- fun to play in ... but hard to leave). Speaking truth keeps us out of the muck and on firm, dry land where we can walk in the light. Weaving lies creates false realities to protect egos or veil intentions ... and they’d have little consequence if they were told in a void, but the reality is they usually hurt others and sometimes have far-reaching, negative consequences. Being strong enough to speak truth? …now, that is a TRUE test of one’s character!

    Image-filled write. Good luck in the contest!


  • Blue Rew silver member
    November 26, 2008

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    I approach this piece from the perspective of surfacing. Awareness too can be associated here. So many times, we lie to ourselves about that and they we've surrounded ourselves with. We bog down in the clay world of delusion until we can not breathe, can not find a smile. Can not deny the truth about those around us and what they have fostered in another life. A gift of writing as always.
    Blue


  • Mari Goes gold member
    November 26, 2008

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    It's very hard to breathe under a muddy puddle made of lies. When we live believing that all we have is truth, and then to find out that they are not, oh man, how devastating it can be! It's better to be aware of lies from start then to wake up with them shoved down our throat. Your poem has very strong images, very well done!