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It'll be just another trip I say to myself
As I size up each tree in passing
Like so many times I've grimaced at the fowl taste on my tongue
which one will withstand the impact..

I glance down at the white nuckles conjoined to my hand,
It grips the wheel at ninety-five miles per hour
the sent of flowers still eminating from my skin
She leaves a trail-in so many ways..

She is the Sun.
Not the Titanic star that gives life to all on Earth
No, she gives life to me
She is the reason, she is the reason..

A contest entry

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  • StarOfDreams23
    December 4, 2008
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    I love this, it makes me wonder if this will ever happen to me...Anyway! GREAT POEM!


  • brittany.geeze
    December 4, 2008

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    Although I like this poem, I can't seem to get into it, perhaps you could expand on the idea a little more. Thanks for the entry

    -Britty


  • J Kard
    December 1, 2008

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    I really like this, its a powerful write. especially how you leave it open to be interpretted. Alot of writers dont do that on here, and just come out and say everything.
    but I did in fact state that the poem couldnt be in more than 4 previous contests. Ill be a little flexible about that though. Good luck in mine!

    • lostmedia
      December 1, 2008

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      oh I'm sorry.. I did not read that.. I'm new to AP and I'm just trying to get some of my work out there and maybe win a contest so I can get some points. But thank you very much, I tried to capture all of the emotion and imagery and at the end I was left open ended so that's how I left the poem. Thanks again!!


  • HereComesTheSun
    November 29, 2008

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    i beilive i got this

    please correct me if i'm wrong but this is about someone committing suicide by car... i loved how it was centered around thoughts and how overall you just wrote a breathtaking piece


  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    November 25, 2008

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    this was a cool poem if i were you i would not revise a thing at all i think you did a very great job here it was a pleasure reading your work

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