And its moments like this
that keep me calm at night
when the doubt comes creeping in
it's things like this that let me know
that you love me without mistake
A moment of close contact
a gentle kiss placed affectionately
on an upturned brow
whispers of love
of cherished memories
and not enough time
for all to soon its time to leave
And it's so hard to let go of you
to stumble up those steps
without turning yet again
for that one last look
at your face, your smile
rushing down the aisle
to find my seat, with bated breath
and a jumping heart
Fling myself into my seat
relieved to see your still there
smiling up at me in love
and i know you will be right there
standing and waiting
when i can come back again
i breathe against the glass
and leave my love
written in the fog
your smile widens
and i turn my head watching you
as the bus slowly pulls away
and i loose sight of you
i sit back and relax
think over all the new memories
shuffling them away
in the recesses of my mind
So i can pull them out tonight
when the panic sets in
and i whisper to myself that i love you
Not knowing that you whisper the same to the wind
Author notes
ASH-ES .. before-i-wake
this was originally for a contest but i mistook 20-50 words for 20-50 lines so i fixed the entry and saved this here.. hope you like..
A contest entry
- NO CLICHE ! YES PREWRITES ! by Anu-Nataraj.
400 points, ended November 28, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pre-writes, with conditions by WarrioroftheHeart.
550 points, ended March 18, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Seems I'm getting a lot of entries from poems that were too long for the requirements of the original contests.
This is a very sweet romantic poem, its very well structured and tells a complete story. Something you should be proud to show off.
If I was going to gripe (and its only a small thing so I'm not, just pointing it out) I would say that the word 'that' in the last line may not be correct, at least in the context it is in. Perhaps something like 'if' would be a better word there.
But a very lovely poem, I wish you all the best in my contest and hope you continue to write as you are inspired to.
Adrian
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i liked this!!
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oh ya n thank you for following the rules..hardly ne1 does..i appreciate it greatly
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oh ya n thank you for following the rules..hardly ne1 does..i appreciate it greatly
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i like it
when i started reading it ..i was like 'cliche'
but although it is about love...there is this distance that tells you its not like any other love poem that disgusts the heck outta me...i reli like it
a love poem...but aint like the rest !
congratulations on this wonderful write friend !
good luck inlfie !
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i think you did a great job on this, it was loving and just strong, keep it flowing, my friend, keep it flowing
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