Such soulful eyes
painted with pain,
A loss never to be
retrieved again
Troy sits and thinks about his past
and what may lie ahead,
It's early hours of the morn,
Too many thoughts churning for bed
At day he may put on a front
for family and friends,
The nights so long almost bring tears
yet he refuses to bend
Far away in a place none know
he holds his thoughts inside,
Yet he will not let his tears fall
although he feels he's died
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt. by Jade.Butterfly.
500 points, ended November 30, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Iee the beats of the heats are turned into the words and thedepth of the sentiments are used as the essence of the subject..well done...
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Well said hiddenly, good job.
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that lonely place no one knows but everybody has one an excellent piece many can relate to
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What a wonderful piece of poetry Georgie.. YOu have woven the feelings through each and every line..
Its so good to be reading your work after such a long time, ages it seems..
Do you remember me?
http://allpoetry.com/poem/187110
Peace,
Lonely
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"Far away in a place none know" knows...
this piece brought tears to my eyes. to know that pondering such an existence goes on more than any one knows.
thanks for sharing.
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A portrait
A scape of pain...could have been my story. -c
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Lovely
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OMG!!
why i am in shock at this piece and how you saw that with just a pic of him.. WOW!!
This is very good! I liked this very much indeed!
-Mandi
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Very good poem. I just wrote my poem titled "My Pain." It's a sad poem but it's worth it.
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