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Realize

Tie dyed green eyes finally catch mine
my limbs freeze in the middle of a busy cafe
Warm plates melt indents in my arms
Like your lips did the night before
Fresh mistletoe still hovers above the door
you knew to take the table there

My thoughts steam and choke my brain
like the fresh pot of coffee waiting to be served

I fake a smile at the people I feed
knowing your watching my every move
like a cat stalking a mouse
but you will not catch me
Walking through the chattering tables
send one more knowing look your way
and see the realization dawn in your eyes
as I disappear back into the kitchen

Author notes

That exerpt inspired me.

I also waitress so that where the rest of it came from

Based on a half true story.

Feel free to DQ me if this isn't what you're looking for

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Comments


  • perfectsunset gold member
    March 16

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    Aww this was beautifully written.
    Very original, and something different to read for once. I really enjoyed this piece.

    Best of luck & thanks for entering


  • xDemonicxAngelx
    December 8, 2008
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    Gosh I loved this! Definately one of my faves from you, it was just so warm and cosy. I really loved the lines:

    I fake a smile at the people I feed
    knowing your watching my every move
    like a cat stalking a mouse
    but you will not catch me

    Brilliant. Congratulations on the gold aswell! You deserved it with this piece.

    Take care


  • bird-mad girl
    December 3, 2008

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    I think this is one of my favorite pieces by you. I loved the use of the cafe setting and the need and careful movements. I can't really explain how it made me feel... warm maybe? I don't know. But I just really dig the texture of this piece and the language and how it's soothing.

    xxx


  • McRae by nature
    November 26, 2008

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    Never, I would not dq this it it perfect. I really love how you were inspired by the example I gave. This was just amazing.

    Carrie