The ancient competition for the Earths luminosity ends,
Apollos chariot careens crooked a crass course
into the deepest cipher of sapphire spat from the Gods,
Baal's scepter scores Geb's complexion as his eyes wince
and shut, suddenly the deepest ebon consumes conception.
Nuit beseeches the galaxy to adjure the starry quorum,
from her lips swim maledictions to cast down the nethermost
ills and wrongs, the stars bare the light that burns the
wrong and extinguishing the blight, quelling the evil,
we the fortuitous man are free now to live another night.
Please tell me what you think
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I love how you have used Greek mythology in some of your poetry.
You have a way with well-crafted word choices and creative imagery that I really admire, Sean. I've been trying to write one about the Norse god of mischief, Loki, for Mercury Rising's arch villain contest, but it has a way to go before it's finished.
Don
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An excellent piece as I've come to expect from you my friend. Like I said earlier, I think it slows down and becomes awkward at two places in the poem, but its such a small thing I didn't even notice it until I re-read it a few times looking for something to critique. Overall I give it an 8.5/10. Most def. a keeper.
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...extinguishing the blight, quelling the evil...
I love the word quelling. It just sounds beautiful with said aloud. Nice write to this prompt. Powerful and filled celestial bodies singing their music to the world.
This is quite well done. Thank you for this gem. ~Pamela
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"chariot careens crooked a crass course" Great alliteration. I really like the strength of your words, the imagery is very powerful. Hope the judge is impressed.
Carrie
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