There is just too much I do not know
the more I ponder my insanity grows
left as paranoid victim to the dark
thoughts become vivid, ruthless, and stark
I can only judge by what I see
trickery and malice lay unbeknownst to me
I sit in wonder, as bitter tears well
efforts are futile against life's greatest spell
Cautious hearts tend to grow cold
preserving the life they preciously hold
an opportunity is given to make things just
melt my heart with the warmth of trust
Tell me what you think
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This was a true write, its hard to say what you really feel sometimes, and as a read this , I feel you still haven’t truly said what you where trying to say…
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We are all blind at times
whether trust, our inner feelings sheltered
Best wishes
Julie
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Nice write Rena. I really don't know what to say to this one except I loved it. The title fits perfectly. I saw, me, standing, trying to decipher some new friends attitudes, but I'm blind and all I see and know is what they look like and the very few things of what I know about them. Good job
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Well written. This piece has an excellent flow and is very expressive in its nature. You've created a dismal atmosphere here, but there is hope in the final two lines. I enjoyed the read. Thank you for sharing.
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beautiful
This is an amazing poem. I'm sure anyone could relate. -
well, you'll have my trust at all times, knowig you like I do, it is a pleasure knowing you, that is for sure. mmm, I like the word, 'unbeknownst'. I like it,
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Wow, people leave you some strange comments.
Anyhell.....
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this is a very honest write. I like your choice of wording, and the rhyme scheme is just right.
My favourite part is the ending. It leaves a positive note and ends the poem nicely.
""an opportunity is given to make things just
melt my heart with the warmth of trust""
I liked it a lot, well done.x
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To be loved... such a wonderful feeling, alas...the not knowing is what kills us. Trust...everything boils down to trust...do you trust him, does he trust you? Do you trust yourself? Do you trust instinct, your heart, your mind....
This is a wonderful and thought provoking write, Rena. It's deep, and you air out a lot of your thoughts and wants...needs. I hope you get your answers one day
Bravo
'D'
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Nothing to say. Just like it. Deal with my indecision, or die.
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yeah, i didn't actually read it, to be honest. reading other people's poetry, for the most part, is not something i like to do. this background is awesome though
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Nicely Penned
I like this! for whatever reason your poetry has a way of making me think very deeply. to me if I were to analyze this poem from my perspective which I am doing well it would deal with trust and how someone has broken it and well you want to regain it or better yet theyw ant to regain yours and well tyour final stanza and lines really made me think about it that way because I cna see the concept of a cold heart protecting yourself from being hurt again and well if one were to be given the full truth it would make things alot better than they were before. any ways just myw eird take on the poem. I do like the beautiful wording and how you wrote it. anyw ays keep up the good work Signed, Tiger
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That is just beautiful rena I love things that rhyme!!! You put into words what I myself have never been able to explain, not even in thought. Very good. I'm going to read more!
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As dark as most of it is, the end is a bizarrely odd twist.
I liked your rhyming scheme, it helped iterate the point rather profoundly. Again though, it seemed so foreboding and cruel to have something so "fuzzy" at the end, it's -almost- a shame. I also appreciated the usage of slightly less than common words, which helps it stand out quite a bit.
Overall, great.
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We are blinded by a lot of things, it may be cause we don't want to see or just don't care. It flows very nicely off the page and a nice way of ending the piece.
QOD
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wow, this is wonderfull...and a litle diff thatn your recent poems...where is the happiness...where is the love? You confuse the ish out of me Rena..lol
I love the poem though it flows so well and as always your rhyming in spot on!
well done,
-Fluff-
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I so love the way you ended this!!! It flows right off of the readers' tongue. Ahhhh to be melted with trust and pure love... simply beautiful!
Peace and Love always
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