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Sorrow

He came to her with love undying
Promised her he was not lying

Love enough for two betrothing
Then he treated her with loathing

Could they make a life together
Or would he be this way forever

Bitter memories abounding
Hateful words of wrath still sounding

If he cared he would not beat her
With such ire he would not treat her

She felt she needed something more
Than what there seemed to be in store

She needed warmth and understanding
Not the abuse that he was handing

Through the years her love depleted
All her hopes and dreams defeated

If she stayed could she endure
More of what had come before

So she left but felt no glory
All she felt was guilt and worry

Though she tried with all her might
To keep his memory out of sight

It did surround her like a curse
This raging guilt would not disperse

Would she ever be forgiven
Would her soul rise up to heaven

Or would she be cast down under
To the depths and cast asunder

But, maybe god would see her sorrow
And send her happiness the morrow

J Lloyd

Author notes

I am not really sure if this is my best.

I was married for 23 years and left 20 years ago and went into a Womans Refuge. I don't know exact dates amd would rather forget. Although I might add I have two wonderful childeren from that marriage. It is about me but I chose to word it as if it was about someone else. Aprox 1964 to 1988

My screne name is "Stella187"

My poem is "Sorrow".

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  • Blue-Rose Beauty
    April 1
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    I loved it.


  • Paloszoo gold member
    March 28

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    Too many women don't get out! Good for you for being one of the small majority! Thanks for entering my contest. Good luck. I'm honored to have you show your work here.


  • RealitysAStory
    March 26
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    I love the rhyme, and I love the store, and I do love your poetry. Write on and good luck.


  • Samplette gold member
    March 15

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    This is very sad, but all to often it happens. Many escape, but too many don't. Well written. Best to you in the contest.
    Sam


  • blood.stained.tears
    February 11

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    great write, i was holding on til the final sentence! sad, but beautiful. i like the rhyming it makes it a fun read, i think anyways, thanks for entering!


  • Kathraina silver member
    January 16

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    Wow great write! This is so so so good! Love the ending especially God can trully fix a broken heart! I know how hard it is to leave, and the worry afterwards. Wonderfully painted words, describe so many situations. Thanks for entering and best of luck!

    ♥ Kathraina


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    December 26, 2008

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    I'm well used to this myself. Promised by a guy that he loves me and will never stop, but basically he is lying. It breaks me to even think of it.


  • mizzamerica91
    December 5, 2008
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    Although i liked this poem, i felt it was a little too long, and set in it's structure. I feel it could benefit from maybe a few longer stanza's, and relaxed rhyming, although the rhyming was good, i think there was a little too much, (although i could just be saying that because i dont normally like rhyme... i dont know). I just feel it was too structured. Other than that though, the poem is very well written.
    Good luck in the contest
    Devon


  • McRae by nature
    November 25, 2008

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    Really clever job of rhyming, not distracting at all.

    "Through the years her love depleted
    All her hopes and dreams defeated"

    I especially liked these two lines. They were very powerful and hopeless. Thanks.

    Carrie

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