I see your face
a dagger through my heart
tear it out and hide it from me
so I can't give it away again,
hide me from this pain,
save me from the hole
I've placed myself in.
Watching as my whole world
slowly fades away
like sand in my hand
the harder I try to hold on
the faster it slips through my fingers.
Begin to realize
that my heart is so far gone
I couldn't get it back if I tried
My soul slowly being torn apart
and it's bleeding
from every torn and tattered edge
dieing inside
and the whole time
I'm trying to mend the pieces
put an end to the blood shed
so that I don't even notice
as every ounce of true,
raw emotion
drains from my body
like ink running down the walls
leaving nothing behind but a stain,
a memory
of what once was,
what could have lasted forever.
Becoming numb
and empty inside
lost from the world
a hollow shell
pull on your mask
you are a puppet
in the hands of fate,
going through the motions
losing touch with who you are,
who you were
and where you want to be.
Letting destiny play you like a piano,
realizing just what it amounted to
what you sacrificed your soul for,
a step short of a deal with the devil,
every wall gone
no more barriers
nothing left to protect you from life,
lost and alone
in the middle of a crowd of thousands
nothing more than a face and a body,
the person you took such pride in being
now gone and for who knows how long.
Stripped down to nothing but a title,
A title you take no pride in holding
cause there is nothing behind it,
it’s simply a title and nothing more.
Author notes
Tell me what you think....ask questions if you don't get it...I know it's random, I'll explain if you would like...
*Blessed Be*
Lauren
B e t t e r T h a n D r u g s
A contest entry
- LOVE ME NOT by Whispering Wind.
700 points, ended December 6, 2008, 25 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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"lost and alone, in the middel of a crowd of thousands nothing mroe tah na face and a body, the person you took such pride in being now gone and for who knows how long. beautiful!!!! i love you sis.!
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from the mask that most do hide behind comes a love yet not felt...striped down to nothingness and bare of soul and thought. feelings bloom from inner need but only because we want them to...excellent and much thought went into this...i thank you for entering
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oh my god! this is a very powerful piece. i absolutley loved it. its so dark and lovely you have so much talent.
i really enjoyed reading this great job and thank you for sharing.
*Blessed Be*
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Thanks for the comment, I'm glad to hear you liked it and I'll take the compliment gladly...lol...and your welcome
*Blessed Be*
Lauren
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im crying while reading this because right now this is what im going through with the guy i love, the only difference is hes like my best friend and hes in love with another friend of mine. It honestly feels like your heart is being ripped from your chest. It sucks. Great write though I love it.
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well she is my best friend I love her with all my heart, but I'm more of a sister to her than a girl friend so...anyway...thanks for the comment, and good luck with the guy, and trust me life gets better just hold on and wait for it, I've been through this before, and I'll make it through again and so will you
*Blessed Be*
Lauren
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I think it is deep and tells a lot about feelings that u have.... did it just like come to you or did u already know i
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I'm an empath, I have lots of control over my emotions way more than most people and I'm also way more intouch with other peoples as well. that all came into play because I wanted to go numb (note this isn't the first time I have felt something like this) and emotions like everything else take the path of least resistance, and when you're a hollow shell there is no resistance...so I clicked in to what everyone else was feeling...life lesson learned ' there is no easy way out'...but anyway, so I've been through it before, but I didn't think I would go through it again, but I have more control now, so...but love lifts you up and then 9times out of 10 drops you back down on your (edit)
Most of it is a state of mind though but thanks for the comment all the same.... I love to get feed back...
*Blessed Be*
Lauren
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It seems to be a a piece of great conflict. At first, there is pain, misery, woe, and doubt. Then the person feeling these emotions would love to turn them off to find solace.
However, instead of finding solace, they find nothing. The person has as many demons as they've always had, but now they are disguised as invisible pieces of nothing. Nothingness can never truly be nothingness. Only a disguised form of pain, that wears the disguisa of "no disguise." Great poem, good luck in the contest. -
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thanks and thanks, and damn sociology classes do you some good...lol...you couldn't be more right, even when you feel nothing you feel something, even if you don't want to and you have no reason to you become more effected by those around you, anyway thanks so much for the comment and the luck
*Blessed Be*
Lauren
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'like ink running down the walls
leaving nothing behind but a stain,
a memory
of what once was,
what could have lasted forever. '
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'Letting destiny play you like a piano,'
were my favourite lines. i found one misspelling, 'dieing' should be 'dying.'
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Thanks for the edit, my spelling is horrible, those are my favs as well, that and puppet in the hands of fate...ink was originaly going to be paint, but then I realized that paint leaves behind much more than just a stain...lol...thanks again, I love to get feed back
*Blessed Be*
Lauren
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I get it, and i like it.
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yay...lol...thanks alot...and for the
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*Blessed Be*
Lauren
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