You break it you bought it
you trashed it you lost it
Well yeah that inst very nice
But I'm not that interested now...
you told me we would make it
i said we probably wouldn't
but you shrugged and smiled
and spoke another layer
to your disguise
adding to the mask upon your face
And all the times we walked along
hands joined between us
and you spoke of things
i had never seen
that was just another chink
in the chain around my neck
You would wrap your arms around me
and ask me for a kiss
you'd whisper sweet nothings in my ear
and swear of your love
that was pulling up the hood
on your crimson cloak of hiding
And that day when i arrived early
just as she was leaving
and she replied she was your love
you came into the doorway
and you looked so surprised
and everything you had built up shattered
Looking up into your true face
i laughed as all you had me by
just tumbled away
you chased after me
spouting sonnets of worthlessness
and begging for forgiveness
I left you standing on that platform
thinking i was coming back
and as we pulled away from the station
a smile lit up my face
this smile it was my freedom
the key to end a web of deceit
A contest entry
- Liar (s) by CarolDesjarlais.
900 points, ended November 30, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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When you write free verse, there is such plentitude of metaphors and figures of speechto use, ways to add depth and SHOW, not tell what you are trying to say. That belt buckle was a great place to start and you could have used more along that line to get the message across. Thank you for entering.
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honestly this poem makes me reflect on a few thing in my past, but nothing i can change at this moment, i do love the ending thou, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


