The evening fell softly
closing the day
in the warmth of night
I sat quietly
waiting
you would come
walking along the beach
dog trotting disinterestedly
and I would see you
see the silver light
shone by the
shy crescent of the moon
light up your hair
and my smile
we would talk
walk
fall in love
tonight
or maybe
tomorrow
Author notes
Prompt:
burn beneath the moon
A contest entry
- burn beneath the moon by Pamela A Lamppa.
1000 points, ended November 26, 2008, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I like this a lot. It is simple in that it is short & complete, but it takes you places, many different places depending on the reader & their mood. It is has the open ended ability to speak differently but always beautifully & elegantly. This is awesome!!! I can picture the dog perfectly & "shy crescent of the moon" lighting up the smile too.. WOW! This is enjoyable again & again!
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Phaw.
That is all I can say. That is a beautiful trophy you've got there; but no where near as beautiful as this piece. You captured the emotion and the imagery with an insanely powerful, poetic tone.
Well done, well deserving. Congrads!!
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This is elegance in simplicity.
Tender
soft
peaceful
and the sea.
There is no finer place to fall in love.
Wonderful tender verse. Thank you for this. Exceptional work. ~Pamela
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A beautiful poem that is a good interpretation of the contest prompt...you're getting really good with your free verse...I like it
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