I've been watching you from far away.
I like what I see.
The way you move on the dance floor has got me all flustered and out of control.
I want to, no I am going to do something crazy.
In my hazey vision, from too much to drink, i make my way to dance floor.
Watching you move it makes me want more than just a dance, or a chance to get in your pants.
I want to be owned by you, controlled by you, for you to make me do anything you want me to.
I find you in the middle and get on my knees.
I couldn't possibly stand in your pressence.
Your essence is overwhelmingly strong.
I can no longer be without your touch.
It's too much to take in all at once.
My senses are being overwhelmed and then you touch me.
You grab my arm and bring me to my feet.
I need you.
You want me to need you.
You take me to the back and down some stairs, off to the basment we go.
It's so cold.
You promise to make it warmer soon.
We make it to the bottom.
It's a big open room, with one table and a couple of chairs.
You make me sit on the stairs and take it all in.
I can see the chains on the walls and can't wait to begin.
You order me naked and i comply of course.
I want to make you happy no matter the cost.
You put a collar on my neck and attach a leash.
You lead me to the table and put straps on my feet.
I am bound and gagged tight.
It feels so right to be here with you right now.
I dont' see how i've ever lived without this.
You poke and prod and whip and torture.
I love it all.
I want it all.
I need it all.
You touch and kiss and lick and pleasure.
It's amazing.
I am in ecstasy, in heaven, on the brink of nirvana.
I swear i will never come down from this high.
You were so right and now i can die a happy girl.
A contest entry
- Seduce me by im dead - go away.
460 points, ended December 29, 2008, 18 entries
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This is great, incredible sensual and erotic. You have an amazing talent! keep writing!
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Deep.
This was very hot, and beautiful. I was amazed at the purity of all these emotions, and then the stains on all of the bad ones being washed away by the blood of the one you love. It leaves a lot up to the imagination which makes it so dynamically incredible. GENIUS WRITE!!!!
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Not bad, not bad.
I liked the lines:
"I love it all.
I want it all.
I need it all."
But that's just kind of my style for things.... I like lists like that.
On a side note,
Keep the capitalization of your "I"s the same, either all upper or all lower case. If they are lower, then all the "You"s should be capital. -
Great poem a lot of depth. Good luck in the contest
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Sweet
Very...Different. But I liked it. Lol. I was waiting for you to like go into this serious erotic lovely sex scene and it turned into bondage. Lol. Brilliant.
Totally Love it Jaydin.
Can I meet you on the dance floor?
lolz.
Keep up the excellent work!
-Zombie Queen
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