Dried
red rose,
the cutting
and sad wilted
reminder of your
cruel broken promise to
respect our love and wait here.
Now death fills up my tattered heart,
as the choking smell of the rose seethes
like a corpse rotting in an unmarked grave.
Misplaced, alone and confused in anger,
I lay upon the freshly tilled dirt,
longing to smell you once again.
Soil and petals slip between
my dry brittle fingers
and mascara runs.
Dead long ago,
my one rose
laid to
rest.
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Comments
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This piece had some strong emotions and feelings. It was good. I really enjoyed reading this. Thank you for enteing and best of luck too you in the contest.
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wow great write you have here. such emotion and imagry. thanks so much for entering and best of luck to you in this contest and in the future
andi
(redhanded) -
i loved this so much!!!!!!
The Positives:
great style great imagery and wonderful metaphores what is not to like
Room For Improvement:
Nothing I can see you did wonderful
My Favorite Part:
Misplaced, alone and confused in anger,
I lay upon the freshly tilled dirt,
longing to smell you once again.
Soil and petals slip between
my dry brittle fingers
Sounded so pretty
Overall:
I give this an 9/10 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.
~*~Apathetic Poison~*~ -
pretty poem... but I want more!!!!!!!!!
more imagery more metafores more length!
best of luck in my contest -
im digging this
so grave and quite upsetting that something so beautiful is dead
thanks for the entries -
a lovely piece thanks so much for sharing
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Wow, great piece! Works really well with the prompt! Love the structure, really adds to it. Great imagery and flow. Lots of emotion invoked in this read. Great job and good luck!
♥ Kathraina -
this was very sad but very good as well you did a really good job penning this poem keep it up and if you ever need someone to talk to i will always be here
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sad poem
ya took this to a great height
thanx and gd luck 2 ya
cheers abe
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Wow!
an amazing poem!
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I love coming to your page and spending time with you; you are an inspiration! This double Etheree is wonderful in flow, imagery and symmetry. Well done!
Love,
Amera♥
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some what like me
i can feel and think i'm a rose but then i get sick and start to wilt i have become the dying rose.which doesn't feel so great.lovely poem and format.good luck in the contest.
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