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you are there

you are there

but you're not
you presence is felt
but not by me

my soul is intact
with everything

my thoughts and

dreams and aspirations

are all here, waiting for you

          ...feeling you

but no: it's a lie
you decieve me

youre spirit is here
but i can't feel

i am lost
without you,
without your soul

for you are not there

        ... liar

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  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    November 30, 2008
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    Straight from the hip writing. thank you for entering it.