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Moonlight

simple sounds of wonder
spent beneath the moon
always casting shadows
as spindly limbs do reach

wander through the open sky
burning white hot moon
floating through the darkness
wafting through the night

touch the sky with tenderness
rising to such heights
softness floats to earth
take a breath and feel the sounds

of night

A contest entry

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  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    December 3, 2008

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    Very beautiful with some lovely imagery!
    Well done and thank you for your thoughts
    on my work! Take care and have a great one.




    Jeremy0826


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    November 26, 2008

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    I would take a breath and feel the sounds of night. Lovely take on this prompt. Beautiful rhythm and flow in this piece.

    wander through the open sky
    burning white hot moon
    floating through the darkness
    wafting through the night.

    I floated and swooned through that stanza. A fine entry. Thank you so much. Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela


  • Samplette gold member
    November 25, 2008

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    A breath taking piece of poetry. Beautifully crafted. The best to you in the contest.
    Sam