as the black dawn appraches
the animals come out to play
there souls burning with love of the night
there eyes blind but there cryes ignite
never ending dances of life
late at night
the souls of those who love the dark and shune
whos souls burn deep with in the light
A contest entry
- burn beneath the moon by Pamela A Lamppa.
1000 points, ended November 26, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
this is a special poem just for my grand friend Rhthm Child
Comments
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Ah..love is around the words ..behind the words..and in front of the words..wonderful impact asnd sweet impact..well said..
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What a cool poem, I love the imagery
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"there souls burning with love of the night
there eyes blind but there cryes ignite"
Should be:
Their eyes burning with love of the night
their eyes blind but their cries ignite.
Last stanza too, I am not sure what shune is and whos should be whose.
Please come back to correct and tweak. I will be back to read this again before the judging.
~Pamela
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