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Simple Greed

 

 

You should have seen the world before it died
it used to be the perfect place to live
but over years so many tears were cried
as man was not prepared to simply give

      While he lived on a rich and pleasant land
      and life diversified in many ways
      but he would always need the upper hand
      and darkness came to haunt his last few days

Destruction caused by him through simple greed
the bounties of the earth he would not share
he left a barren world that could not feed
so many died and no-one seemed to care

      The harmony of life could never be
      the world before it died was poetry

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Nymphetemine
    December 16, 2008

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    You are a wonderful poet. I have never written a sonnet. But yours was lovely. Well written.
    Good luck with your writing.
    Yorkshire Bard. Blessings


  • Titus gold member
    November 30, 2008

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    The undulations in this are as bleak as the atmosphere you give to us. Not a moment throughout was a volta, and without the turning point I guess it never going to be routinely courageous, but what you did was put a fantastic account to say, that you mimicked nature in all its brevity, as all of a sudden, nice job.


  • Samplette gold member
    November 26, 2008

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    A wonderfully crafted sonnet. Sad, but touches so much truth. Very nice. Best wishes in the contest.
    Sam


  • arafura gold member
    November 25, 2008
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    Lovely work! Sad but true of the human race...


  • ladyhelenaofsorrows
    November 25, 2008

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    great write, i love it!! and so true....makes you ashamed of the human race. the rhyme was very well done throughout. lovely!

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