The stars bathe in dew,
and I get the leftovers,
as I wait beneath the moon.
One of Cupid's bows,
but without a string,
she stretches out across the sky
and weeps,
her tears, falling to the earth,
falling on me - rearing up,
bursting into flames -
but I'm protected by the stardew
and in a chariot of fire
I ascend
to the right hand of Heaven
leaving behind a comet's tail
and firefly goodbye cards.
Author notes
I'm not usually very good at "keeping things tasteful..." but this is a seriously beautiful prompt.
prompt - burn beneath the moon
RW Graphics 2008 provided by contest holder.
Title ideas welcome.
A contest entry
- burn beneath the moon by Pamela A Lamppa.
1000 points, ended November 26, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Beautiful in its imagery, you do have a way with words that belies your age... keep writing
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Very tasteful - title is excellent.
Wonderful imagery in this piece and a lovely story wrapped up in the value of human emotion. How it withstands the heat of broken love only to rise even higher as it learns.
Impressive work here. I am pleased to see one so young writing so very well. Keep up the good work and thank you for such a splendid entry. I loved this. ~Pamela
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i love all the images here... this is one magical ride (:
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wow this is amazing. The ending is great! I love the whole thing and the imagery in this.
great write
good luck in the contest
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