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Grandfather

With a fragmented mind, I cut through the downy morning;

Soft like butter, the clouds parted so that I may see your face again.

There you stood in your audacious manner as you always would,

scowling my feebleness upon facing your finality.

You were never something I understood, remorse was never in your eyes.

My knees buckled, cracking the earth, how could you mock me?

I closed my eyes and you were gone,

leaving me with an outstretched hand, alone and dry in desolation.

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Title: Tree of Burden
Artist: Z. Beksinski

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  • oceanbluize
    November 26, 2008

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    A sad tale and clever take on the prompt...a true look inside. It's amazing how when you as people to lose them selves in an image...the diversity of interpretations you get...A solid write...best of luck!
    Ocean.