The sea's abyss my heart became one night
I dreamed of swelling towers blue and white
Of jagged stone in floating shimmers hung -
Here where Love's haunting words were softly sung
The sea became my love and my delight.
My love, my burning love for thee, O sprite
Of cherished beauty, goddess of my sight
Here will I love thee, here our fount is sprung -
Sprung from the sea's abyss.
For all its depth and all unfathomed might
Cannot contain my love's great depth and height -
And if, my love, I from thy heart am flung
The sea will swallow me, and there among
The rocks will die, and dwell in endless night -
There in the sea's abyss.
Author notes
a rondeau, obviously a male voice. . . another of my favorites - I love the romantic and this poem I threw alot of that love into to make it what it is, to make it embody my idea of a simple love poem that kind of express my feeling too. . .
Option 3 - any Valentine's Day poem that fits the rules
A contest entry
- Romance by BabyBun.
850 points, ended November 28, 2008, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Romance & Men by JesusFreak92.
550 points, ended December 12, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - My one year birthday fantasy bash! by Dark Otter.
1000 points, ended January 22, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make this THE largest Contest EVER on AP [enter, enter, enter!] by Symphony.
18000 points, ended April 28, 1014 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Come! Amazing promts! Plus any Valentines day Poem! (pics. words. ect....) by Lost in a Dreamstar.
605 points, ended April 13, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is a brilliant and stunning piece of writing! Superb! To be read over and over again! Oh, did I say that I loved it! I do, indeed!!!
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Good job capturing the love in this.
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Congratulations on the Golden Chalice!!
I love sea poems, this is fabulous!!
Thank you for sharing your muse!!
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thank you muchly, Poet.
*bows* 
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rereading this terrific poem I believe it is a work of near genius...
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I'm not surprised that this received first place in a contest - what a wonderful welling ode of joy and love and absolute bliss...
I don't know what else to say, certainly no criqitue here - this flowed so easily, and was very strong - passionately so - it was a joy to read
Thanks for entering
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thank you. . .
yes, this is one of my favorite poems I've written, because I wrote it from inside me and put some of my own feeling in it. . .
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this is a suberb poem! The sea, the sea and love--what could fit together more perfectly in poetry? This a marvelous and beautiful poem!
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thank you, thank you. . .
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I do love this!
I am so happy that I came back to this. Something in this stirs something in me. I, reiterate, this piece hit me and hit me hard. I am stunned by its beauty. -
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oh thank you! It's very pleasing to know my words can have that effect on someone. . .
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Style in the making
I see you emlating the masters and doing a good job at it. It is obvious that you have particular influences (ones we share in common). Your voice is beautiful and the imagery of the highest romantic nature. Thank you for this!
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(ha ha) oh, I do thank you! Y' guessed right about the influences - I tend to try to write like them. . .
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Wow!!! Absolutely breathtaking...
Wonderful narrative, rhyme & flow with passion & emotional depth that made it more than worthy of the Gold shiney you're sporting...
Keep up the good work...
Well done!!!
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You left a wonderful comment on one of my poems so I thought I'd drop by your house to meet you. I'm glad I did! I see why this masterpiece won gold. The imagery is fantastic but the decasyllable structure is stunning and adds depth to the entire piece. The rhymes are perfect with the meter, smooth and deliberate without any slant or force at all. Bravo!
Love,
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This piece alone makes my contest worthwhile - I loved it.
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The Rondeau is beautiful French form and you composed this one with imagery and depth of feeling. The secret to this form is in the strength of the repeating line. Well done!
Love,
Amera♥
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thank u much! this one took a while to figure out. . .but it worked!
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This is a beautiful piece full of love with a touches of sadness.
Nice pen, poet
Jem
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